Shining but not in that plastic sense
of light hitting the soul at a weird angle
leaving all wings and fluttery things
bouncing through the blue
Sustained incandescence; creation
selfless comfort wrapped tight
inspirited sentry directing inflection
leaving all wings and fluttery things
bouncing through the blue
Sustained incandescence; creation
selfless comfort wrapped tight
inspirited sentry directing inflection
making sure nothing blew
my fires out
she simply stayed
my fires out
she simply stayed
as all angels do
Jebbi-- this is beautiful, absolutely adore it. xC.
ReplyDeleteThanks very much Christi! :)
ReplyDeletesuch a strong write! your descriptions are feather-light and the poem has a wicked cadence! loved the "at a weird angle" bit - nicely done!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much!
ReplyDeleteJebbi, I adore this poem. It is so spiritual - my fav includes "Sustained incandescence"
ReplyDeleteSheila, Thank you so much!! :)
ReplyDeleteVery artful. Such careful word placement and rhythm. You infused it with an extra dimension. I enjoyed reading it.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Steve!
ReplyDeleteI liked this very much. Thanks.
ReplyDeletewhat a beautiful picture and the poem is lovely and pleasant to rread
ReplyDeleteRemember this one from the board. Turned out lovely, Jebbi. One of my favorites by you!
ReplyDeleteWonderful write, you captured the picture and brought it forth in a whole new light.
ReplyDeleteBudah, Quotes, Ginny and Pat..thanks so much for reading and your comments!!
ReplyDeletethis is very beautifull..esp that last stanza which to me carries a lot of emotion....well done...
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautiful. You have a new follower.
ReplyDeleteThat is a very intensely felt, sustained moment. I really began to see the being you had called up with words.
ReplyDeletenice..shining but not in the plastic sense..and then staying..what a great closure jebbi
ReplyDeleteFantastic! short but deep and meaningful. Love it :)
ReplyDeleteI love what you have done here Jebbi.. conjured a strong spiritual sense.. firmly rooted in the everyday (and weird is just right there :)
ReplyDeletewhats on your other shoulder? - lol.
ReplyDeletein complete agreement with becky - spiritual but in a fashion i can except...
even love to understand :)
Brian, Laurie! :), Charles, Claudia, Blaza, Becky and Arron....Thank you all so much for your comments!! And some new visitors and followers! Wahoo!! That is exciting to me! I appreciate all of your words, truly!
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